Sunday, June 8, 2014

CD: analyze that haiku 1



in the old barn
behind the hay bales
a secret meeting                                © Chèvrefeuille (2011)
~~~~~
he said he would if...
she would, could give of herself
but the young boy lied

©JP/davh
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Analysis:
I can think of things as simple as a spider wanting
to build a web in the shade or complex as a group
of moonshiners gathering and plotting where to safely
build their next still. My haiku reflects a memory.


We can only come at something, from where we
already have been. Cheverfeuille’s haiku brought
to mind a childhood memory. Little girls and boys
play and dare to be grown up. Secretly meet to
‘play house’ - but things do not always go as planned.

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2 comments:

  1. ChèvrefeuilleJune 8, 2014 at 7:42 PM

    A nice analysis Jules ... what a joy to read that this haiku brought childhood memories back.

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  2. AnonymousJune 9, 2014 at 4:11 AM

    I have to agree and like the sentence: "We can only come at something, from where we
    already have been." Well done!

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