Sunday, April 1, 2012

Melt My Heart?

Melt My Heart?

So keen to do my bidding
All I need to do is whisper
And they shall spring into action
One single, or the whole pack
On point to do whatever I wish
No leashes or string to hold taut
Always willing to heel -
I’ve no need to use a poison without smell
Or make an apple for a princess to taste
I need no trick to chase my quarry
I’ve the perfect pet
In livery with brass buttons that shine
Their added wings accent their supple shape
Delightful and with glee my pretty pawns
They are with tail and paw -
Monkey see; I point; Monkey do!

JP/davh (April 1, 2012)

Worlde #50 http://sundaywhirl.wordpress.com/2012/04/01/wordle-50/
pet, string, paw, smell, wish, point, pack, trick, shine, shape, taste, whisper

Process notes: I wanted to create something outside ‘the box’, nontraditional,
but always...fun. and I am a great fan of Mr. Baum and his many Oz stories.
Enjoy!
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9 comments:

  1. I like what you created with the words. Definitely 'outside of the box.' Well done!

    Here is mine:

    http://inthecornerofmyeye.blogspot.com/2012/04/questions.html

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  2. I love this! Not only outside the box but wonderful!

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  5. A delightful read. Love where you took those wordle words. And your take on the "poison" and "apple" - wicked!

    Richard

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  6. Delightful read, Jules. Enjoyable.

    Pamela

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  7. Jules- this is really very clever- You took these words right out of this world into the Land Of Oz. I was not clever enough to make the connection without your process notes...Drat... It is so obvious now!!! Great write.

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  8. It's been a long time since I've envisioned those liveried monkeys, but I see them clearly once again through your poem.

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  9. Interesting and clever point of view. Few would have thought to look this way. I like. I much appreciate when folks try to find some unexpected angle on the familiar.

    Once, long long ago, some prompt asked to take a "villains" point of view (meaning from their perspective, they're doing it right and justified). Hard for many to allow themselves I think. (At the risk of being naughty) all I might suggest is to make this poem even more about "my darling dear monkeys" to even further push the idea for all it's worth. (I'm a trouble maker perhaps.)

    And (me bad again?), shouldn't that be "taut" instead of "taught"? (pardon pardon)

    neil

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