Sunday, January 13, 2013

SW91 A Concrete Poem

http://sundaywhirl.wordpress.com/2013/01/13/wordle91/

burden, bends, drunk, poetry, virtue, palace,
ditch, diminishing, wish, breaks, room, steps


 SW 91: A Concrete Poem:



\\there is no burden, around the bends,//
\as the diminishing path leads to or/
from a palace or ditch...the steps
\we take make room for our/
\\wish to write poetry.//
life and duty are
minimal
breaks
taken
after we
have drunk the
\virtue of blank paper with the ink of our being/

(c) JP/davh
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9 comments:

  1. MargoJanuary 13, 2013 at 10:20 AM

    Um, wow. Just that, wow. You may send me the link, young woman, so I have this safely archived in gmail. Those last two lines... wow.

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  2. brenda wJanuary 13, 2013 at 11:25 AM

    I love the ending, Jules. The form is tight and holds the content well.

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  3. AnonymousJanuary 13, 2013 at 12:32 PM

    Fantastic Jules, every last jot and tittle. This is wonderful!

    Elizabeth
    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2013/01/13/once-again/

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  4. Stan SkiJanuary 13, 2013 at 1:39 PM

    Give me a glass of that!

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  5. NonnieJanuary 14, 2013 at 5:54 PM

    love concrete poems! they are so much fun to write, even with first graders doing it. (former teacher here)
    as I read, I wondered...when will the drink occur? :)

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  6. Sharp Little PencilJanuary 15, 2013 at 12:52 AM

    Jules, loved the form and the wordplay. Using the blank paper and ink at the ending was lovely. Wonderful. Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.com/2013/01/14/the-royal-pain/

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  7. flaubertJanuary 16, 2013 at 10:58 PM

    Echoing the others, Jules. This is really nicely done with the visuals.

    Pamela

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  8. Magical Mystical TeacherJanuary 17, 2013 at 6:54 AM


    What a wondrous cup you have given us to drink from!

    Whirling with Bram Stoker

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  9. J Cosmo NewberyJanuary 18, 2013 at 3:22 PM

    Yes, a fascinating poem in both form and structure! Nicely done.

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