Sunday, June 24, 2012

SW 62, RM MM 3: Just Peachy?

Just Peachy?
Johannah did not like the montage of demons that haunted her dreams
Waking to the sunset after a nap - the ample jasmine that surrounded her
Window did not seem the slightest bit flawed in this domain that seemed to
Sparkle under its’ new found freedom

She needed to maintain a granite composure in order not to feel trapped
Scrapping the last bit of her foul mood from fogged sleep vision
It was time to whistle as she made her way to visit Booker her steed
Who loved the grooms attentiveness

Perhaps a quick ride in the orchard before dinner would be wise
There was still ample radiation from the sun, she would ask the kind
Groom which path would be a good one to take in this honeyed sky
Listening to just the sounds of her heart...

She might be able to subtract what ever falseness might be lurking -
Was the relief here just paper thin? There had to be a hidden art
Knowing what was truth - if only she could talk to pixies - they were real,
If one believed in wizards - pixies had to be real

And not just viewed after downing large quantities of a absinthe -
Jo knew better than to over indulge in that regard!
Always, always keep your wits about you, only way to control
Your sword - her father had said.

JP/davh
jasmine, demons, window, scrap, ample, montage, flawed, granite, trapped, whistle, domain, sunset
http://sundaywhirl.wordpress.com/2012/06/24/wordle-62/
sound, pixie, honey, wake, wise, paper, absinthe, subtract, orchard, radio (radiation), taken, art
http://rosemarymint.wordpress.com/2012/06/22/midweek-melting-week-3/

Process notes: The two lists combined nicely to continue this journey...#7. See the whole ‘She-bang’
here: http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/p/story-verse-series-b.html


I also managed a second verse on the Wordle:
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/06/sunday-whirl-62-crust-2.html
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10 comments:

  1. flaubertJune 24, 2012 at 3:25 PM

    Jules, love the imagery of pixies and absinthe. They seem to go together, don't they?

    Pamela

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  2. HannahJune 24, 2012 at 3:49 PM

    "needed to maintain a granite composure"

    and

    "take in this honeyed sky
    Listening to just the sounds of her heart...

    Love these!!

    Ah yes and the message of the mighty word...great write Jules!!!

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  3. DaydreamertooJune 24, 2012 at 4:25 PM

    Oh yes, doesn't pay to be even half drunk in charge of a sword, or a steed either :)
    Nicely told Jules ... quite a gem in fact. :)

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  4. rosemary mintJune 24, 2012 at 4:50 PM

    I like these: "granite composure," "honeyed sky," and the closing ... "always keep your wits about you, only way to control Your sword."

    Great idea to combine the two lists. :)

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  5. Mr. WalkerJune 25, 2012 at 11:13 AM

    I like the structure of your stanzas. And some great phrases in those first couple of stanzas: "montage of demons", "granite composure" - and that whole second line of the second stanza, what you've done with "scrapping".

    Richard

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  6. C.C. June 25, 2012 at 2:06 PM

    I like the story/poem quality. Continuation of your saga it seems. I like the granite composure as well. NIce work.

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  7. Veronica RothJune 26, 2012 at 12:48 AM

    "Scrapping the last bit of her foul mood...", such a good line! Wish I was capable of doing that!

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  8. AnonymousJune 26, 2012 at 9:08 AM

    Hi. Thank you for your kind comments on my Sunday Whirl poem. I'm glad to see that you've also taken on Rosemary's prompt because I wanted to but ran out of mental steam. I might try later in the week. My favourite from your wonderful piece is "granite composure" -- wonderful phrase, and nicely done.

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  9. ElizabethJune 27, 2012 at 2:21 PM

    I would but echo the favorites others have chosen. Really like that you have chosen to continue your tale. Wonderful inspiration for all of us, Jules. Thank you,

    Elizabeth

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  10. vivinfranceJune 27, 2012 at 4:34 PM

    There are some lovely sections in this, and the meandering dreamlike quality is well portrayed. I still prefer your second attempt!

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