Sunday, September 9, 2012

Sunday Whirl 73: Pause

Pause
As Johannah neared the kingdom that was said to be the home
of the young hero she could see the fatted contented cows in the rugged fields -
it was said that the kingdom had all but returned to its former grace and splendor,
the suffering all but forgotten though she had met warriors who remained alert.

The fierce passion that had willed her shaken spirit this far
wanted to see the marble interior of the palace, but she just wasn’t ready.
Unsure of just what blessing she was seeking she lead her roan Booker
in silence up a remote path away from the bustle and contentment of the populous.  

Well supplied and rested from their last stop horse and rider
unknowingly started up the path of the sacred mountain where it was rumored
that only the invited were allowed to tread - through thick mists that were
the protective portal to a dimension that few mortals ever entered alive.

Nevaeh could use such an adversary in her private army against her twin Acheron.
Thankfully with their bond broken he could no longer read her mind or emotions -
Unfortunately that worked both ways - she still felt she could defeat him and eventually
restore a more natural balance to this world.

While Acheron the evil wizard still breathed - there could be trouble.
The young one once known as Here-boy freed the once bound good magics
but that was only one part of the sum total of damage her brother
had caused on this particular ball of life in this universe...

JP/davh

SW 73 http://sundaywhirl.wordpress.com/2012/09/09/wordle-73/
remote, warriors, fierce, suffering, silence, shaken,
blessing, rugged, cows, splendor, marble, grace

(Story Verse A 12 piece)
Process Notes: Thank you Brenda for again producing a list that seems to lend itself well to my story verse. Maybe I just make it work. I’m having fun, I hope you enjoy the continuing story. This piece is another that links both stories together. Also with a nod margoroby.wordpress.com; punctuation  and the comments therein; I am attempting to move into the current century in regards to making my poetry easier to read and use capitalization and punctuation in a more politically correct light.
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15 comments:

  1. MarianneSeptember 9, 2012 at 8:19 AM

    Impressive the way you have used the words to write this continuing story, Jules! Well done!

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  2. vivinfranceSeptember 9, 2012 at 8:21 AM

    I appreciate the punctuation! The story is evolving nicely - it will be interesting to see it as a whole.

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  3. DaydreamertooSeptember 9, 2012 at 8:37 AM

    The sacred mountain sounds interesting. I forgot all about the wordle words reading this Jules.

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  4. AnonymousSeptember 9, 2012 at 9:55 AM

    Proud of you. You are a born storyteller. Now it looks as well as sounds like a story. You weave us such wonderful sagas.

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  5. brenda wSeptember 9, 2012 at 10:25 AM

    Hey Jules....I will patiently wait for the evil Acheron's end. Bwahaha! This is a fun story to follow. I'm rooting for Neveah!

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  6. ElizabethSeptember 9, 2012 at 11:20 AM

    Most writing is practice and we learn as we go. You are having fun and that's what counts as we learn much more when we are enjoying the process. You and the words make good partners, telling this tale and watching it unfold.

    Elizabeth
    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2012/09/09/wheres-the-beef/

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  7. De JacksonSeptember 9, 2012 at 5:12 PM

    Love your continuing story.
    LOVE this line:
    "The fierce passion that had willed her shaken spirit this far"

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  8. AnonymousSeptember 9, 2012 at 6:55 PM

    ...another great installment to the story.

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  9. Benjamin ThomasSeptember 9, 2012 at 9:53 PM

    ditto.... your story seems to flow easily.
    I envy your diligence. I always have a few stories swirling in my head but lack the character and craft to deliver.

    Thanks for your comments

    Benjamin

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  10. S.E.IngrahamSeptember 9, 2012 at 10:35 PM

    The saga continues and good on you for getting some punctuation under control as well (I vacillate widely with my views on how to handle my own work and punctuating ...) - as always a good story to carry your tale forward ... you are weaving the words pretty much effortlessly

    http://thepoet-tree-house.blogspot.ca/2012/09/plain-faith.html

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  11. AnonymousSeptember 10, 2012 at 11:57 AM

    Great fun to read, and I look forward to seeing more.

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  12. flaubertSeptember 10, 2012 at 12:54 PM

    Great storytelling, Jules. You were born to tell engaging tales.

    Pamela

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  13. Ms. BeckySeptember 10, 2012 at 8:36 PM

    hmmm, I think I've come into the middle of the story here but I love this line:
    "through thick mists that were
    the protective portal to a dimension that few mortals ever entered alive".
    thanks for Screen/Scene. I truly love it. It's a keeper Jules.
    happy week to you.

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  14. CathySeptember 10, 2012 at 9:44 PM

    Great story. Interesting to see how it continues.

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  15. Chris LawrenceSeptember 11, 2012 at 1:12 AM

    Jules great storytelling i love it

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